Variant I
Прошедший год стал самым жарким в США за всю историю метеорологических наблюдений, которые ведутся в стране с 1895 года. Средняя температура в 2012 году составила 12,9 градуса, что на целых 0,6 градуса превысило прежний рекорд 1998 года. Из всех месяцев самым жарким был июль. Он тоже побил все рекорды: его средняя температура составила 24,9 градуса, это самый большой показатель за всю историю метеонаблюдений. Как отмечают ученые, причинами столь жаркого года стали глобальное потепление и естественные колебания климата.
В 2012 году в США произошло 11 природных катастроф, связанных с погодой. В их числе — обрушившийся в конце октября на Восточное побережье страны ураган "Сэнди" и продолжавшаяся несколько месяцев засуха, охватившая почти две трети территории страны и ставшая самой суровой с пятидесятых годов прошлого века.
Выводы ученых основываются на показаниях более чем 1200 метеостанций со всех американских штатов. На Аляске минувший год был, наоборот, несколько прохладнее и дождливее среднего.
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Variant II
Ураган "Сэнди" медленно смещается в сторону канадской границы, оставляя за собой шлейф разрушений и жертв. На северо-востоке США миллионы жителей остались без электричества и транспорта, множество домов затоплены или разрушены.
За два дня было отменено более 15 тысяч авиарейсов. После того, как ураган "Сэнди" в ночь на вторник обрушился на восточное побережье США, особенно пострадали штаты Нью-Джерси и Нью-Йорк. В Нью-Йорке рекордно высокие волны - до 4,2 м - залили туннели и метро. В городе погибли 10 человек, в основном от падающих деревьев и от пожаров. Президент США Барак Обама объявил штат Нью-Йорк зоной стихийного бедствия и ввел там режим чрезвычайного положения. Шквальный ветер вызвал наводнения и привел к транспортному коллапсу и отключениям электричества. В Нью-Йорке взорвалась трансформаторная подстанция, была эвакуирована одна больница, сгорело 50 домов. В результате удара стихии в США погибли по меньшей мере 32 человека.
Количество жителей в районах, подлежащих обязательной эвакуации, может достичь одного миллиона.
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Variant I
ReplyDeleteThe last year was the hottest in USA ever knew in history of meteorological observations, which are dating in the country since 1895. The average temperature in 2012 was 12.9 degrees, which by 0.6 higher than the privies record in 1998. July was the hottest month of them all. He also broke the record. His average temperature was 24.9 degrees; it was the highest index ever knew in history of meteorological observations. As sciences claim, the reasons of so hot year are global warming and natural climate. In 2012 in USA happened 11 natural disasters, because of weather-related. Among them where – The hurricane Sandy which fell up on the east coast by the end of October and a lasted drought for several months, capture almost two-thirds of countries territory and was identified as the most sever since 50s. The scientific conclusions are based on the indexes of more than 1200 observatories from all states. On the contrary the past year for Alaska was cooler and rainier than average.
- ever known;
Delete- privies record in 1998--> SPELLING!
- He also broke the record. His average temperature was 24.9 degrees;--> he???
- because of weather-related.???
- Sandy which fell up on the east coast --> WRONG VERB!
- a lasted drought for several months?
Valnetina, you need to work more upon the structure of your sentences. You get the essence, but do not know how to make it sound naturally in English. Good luck! Practice makes perfect!
The last year became the hottest in usa of all-time of meteorological supervision, which are conducted in the country since 1895. The average temperature in 2012 was 12,9 degrees, that as many as 0,6 degrees higher than 1998 year last record . Among months the hottest was July. It also broke all the records: his average temperature was 24,9 degrees, this is the highest indicator of all-time of meteological observation. As the scientists note, that the reasons of such a hot year became the Global Warming and natural climate oscillation. In 2012 year in USA has taken place 11 natural disasters related to weather. This number consists of Hurricane Sandy that brought down in the east coast hurricane Sandy in the end of October and continuing for several months drought, involved almost two thirds of country’s territory becoming the severest since 50s. Scientist’ conclusions are based on 1200 meteorological stations’ indicators from all American states. In Alaska last year was quite the contrary, a bit more colder and rainy of average level.
ReplyDeleteметеорологические наблюдения = weather observations; or meteorological ...
DeleteSupervision - надзор;
- are conducted - WRONG WORD CHOICE;
- that as many as 0,6 degrees higher than 1998 year last record --> SENTENCE STRUCTURE! WHERE IS YOUR VEBR?
- his average temperature -HIS???
- In 2012 year in USA has taken place 11 natural disasters related to weather. --> WRONG TENSE!
- This number consists of Hurricane Sandy that brought down in the east coast hurricane Sandy in the end of October and continuing for several months drought, involved almost two thirds of country’s territory becoming the severest since 50s. --> TOO LONG AND INCOMPREHENSIBLE! GRAMMAR!!!
Kate, try to say your ideas in English. Do not use Russian sentence patterns when you write in English. For example, look at this sentence - Among months the hottest was July. - this not how it should be in English!
Keep on practicing!
Variant 1
ReplyDeleteLast year was the hottest in the United States in the history of meteorological observations, which are maintained in the country since 1895.The average temperature was 12.9 degrees in 2012, that as much as 0.6 degrees higher than the previous record in 1998. July was the hottest of all the months.He also broke all records: the average temperature was 24.9 degrees,this is the highest
parameter of weather observations.Like scientists note, the reasons for such hot year was global warming and natural climate variability.In 2012 there were 11 natural disasters related to weather in the U.S. Among them was the hurricane "Sandy" which made landfall at the end of Octobre on the East coast of the country and several months of drought that covered almost two-thirds of the country and has become the most severe since the fifties of the last century.Conclusions of scientists based on the evidence of more than 1200 weather stations from all U.S. states.Conversely last year was a little cooler and rainier than average in Alaska.
- that as much as 0.6 degrees higher than the previous record in 1998. -VERB?
Delete- He also broke all records- HE???
- has become the most - TENSE FORM?
- .Conclusions of scientists based on the evidence of more than 1200 weather stations from all U.S. states. - WHERE IS THE VERB IN THIS SENTENCE?
JULIA, Google Translate can be of great help when you translate phrases or words, but nor chunks of text. Machines do not know Grammar, they cannot think.
Variant II
ReplyDeleteHurricane "Sandy" is slowly shifting to the Canadian border, leaving behind a trail of destruction and victims. At the north-east of United States, millions of people were left without electricity and transport, many houses were flooded or destroyed. For two days were canceled more than 15,000 flights. After the hurricane "Sandy", strucked on Monday night on the east coast of the U.S., particularly was affected the states of New Jersey and New York. In New York, a record high waves - up to 4,2 m - flooded tunnels and underground. In the city died 10 people, mostly from falling trees and fire. U.S. President Barack Obama declared New York a disaster zone and imposed there a state of emergency. Heavy wind caused flooding and led to traffic collapse and power outages. In New York have exploded a transformer substation, was evacuated a hospital, burned 50 houses. As a result of the disaster in the U.S., have died at least 32 people. Number of residents in regions subject to obligatory evacuation could reach one million.
Thank you!
- After the hurricane "Sandy", strucked on Monday night on the east coast of the U.S., particularly was affected the states of New Jersey and New York. - WORD ORDER!!!
Delete- For two days THERE were canceled ...
- imposed a state of emergency --> the verb is DECLARED not IMPOSE
- In New York have exploded a transformer substation, was evacuated a hospital, burned 50 houses --> WHERE IS THE SUBJECT??
- have died at least 32 people.--> TENSE??? WORD ORDER???
BE more attentive, Anastasia. The mistakes are silly!
The last year became the hottest in USA ever known of meteorological observations, which are dating in the country since 1895. The average temperature in 2012 year was 12,9 degrees, that exceeded in 0,6 previous record in 1998. From all monthes the hottest was July. It as well has broken all records: the average temperature was 24,9 degree, it is the most highest rate in the all history of meteorological observations. How note scientists, reasons of the hottest year have became by global warming and natural fluctuations of climate. In 2012 in USA have occurred 11 nature disasters relating with weather. Among them – had broken down the hurricane “Sandy” at the end of the October in the Eastern Coast country and was continuing several monthes drought was enveloping almost two thirds territory of the country and has become the most severe from the fifties years last century. Conclusions of the scientists are based on statements more than 1200 weather stations from all States. Conversely the last year in Alaska was slightly cool and rainier than average.
ReplyDelete- in 2012 year??? HOW DO WE WRITE YEARS IN ENGLISH?
Delete- monthes ??
- has broken all records- TENSE?
- the most highest rate ??? DOUBLE SUPERLATIVE???
- How note scientists- DIRECTLY FROM RUSSIAN
- In 2012 in USA have occurred 11 nature disasters relating with weather - PREPOSITION,TENSE?
- was continuing several monthes drought was enveloping almost two thirds territory of the country ??? SENTENCE STRUCTURE!!!
TEH SENTENCE BEFORE THE LAST MISSES SOMETHING!
Variant 2
ReplyDeleteHurricane "Sandy" is slowly displaced aside the Canadian border, reserving a loop of destructions and victims. In northeast USA millions residents have remained without an electricity and transport, set of houses are flooded or destroyed. For two days it has been cancelled more than 15 thousand flights. After hurricane "Sandy" on the night of Tuesday has fallen upon east coast USA, states of New Jerseys and New York have especially injured. In New York record-breaking high waves - up to 4,2 m - have filled in tunnels and the subway. In city were lost 10 person, basically from falling trees and from fires. President of the United States Barack Obama has declared state of New York a zone of act of nature and has entered there a mode of state of emergency. The heavy wind has caused flooding and has led to a transport collapse and switching-off of an electricity. In New York the transformer substation has blown up, one hospital has been evacuated, 50 houses have burned down. As a result of impact of elements in the USA 32 persons were lost at least. Quantity of residents in regions subject to obligatory evacuation could reach one million.
displaced aside - word choice!
Deletereserving a loop - word choice
an electricity - AN is not needed, electricity is uncountable
For two days it has been cancelled more than 15 thousand flights. - word order!!! first subject, then verb!
....
You are trying to translate the sentences as they are in Russian, but it is necessary to change the pattern of a sentence to make it sound natural in English!
variant I
ReplyDeleteLast year became the hottest in the USA for all history of weather observations which are maintained in the country since 1895. The average temperature was 12,9 degrees in 2012, that on the whole 0,6 degrees beat a former record of 1998. From all months July was the most hot. It also broke all records: its average temperature was 24,9 degrees, it is the highest indicator of all history of weather observations. As the scientists note, Global Warming and natural climate oscillation became the reasons of so hot year. In 2012 in the USA 11 natural disasters happened in connecting with weather. Among them — the hurricane "Sandie" fallen at the end of October on East coast of the country and and several months of drought which captured nearly two thirds of the territory of the country and has become the most severe since the fiftieth years of the last century. Conclusions of scientists are based on indications more than 1200 meteorological stations from all American states. On Alaska the past year, on the contrary, was slightly more cool and more rainy than an average.
the most hot ??? grammar!
Deleteso hot year = such a hot year!
in connecting with weather. - word choice!
"Sandie"??? SANDY
has become the most severe since the fiftieth years of the last century. -- what has become? where is the subject?
slightly more cool and more rainy than - comparative degrees!!! grammar!!!
variant 1
ReplyDeleteLast year was the hottest in the United States in the history of weather observations, which are dating in the country since 1895. The average temperature in 2012 was 12.9 degrees, that exceeded in 0.6 degrees the previous record in 1998 . July was the hottest of all the months. It also broke all records: the average temperature was 24.9 degrees, this is the highest figure in the history of weather observations. As the scientists note, the reasons of such a hot year became the Global Warming and natural climate variability. In 2012, in the U.S. happened 11 natural disasters related to weather. Among them was the hurricane "Sandy" which made landfall at the end of October on the East coast of the country and several months of drought that covered almost two-thirds of the country and has become the most severe since the fifties of the last century. Conclusions of scientists are based on the indications of more than 1200 weather stations from all U.S. states. In Alaska, last year was, on the contrary, somewhat cooler and rainier than average.
in the U.S. happened 11 natural disasters - word order!!!
Deletenext sentence has very and and and and conjunctions - maybe it would sound better if you divided it into several separate sentences!
In general, you translation is good - the best I have read till now!
Well done!